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  1. Kokomisama on Chapter 2 Sat 23 Aug 2025 11:26PM UTC

    [He emerged from the trees like a whispered secret, his dark brown hair tousled by the breeze, falling slightly over his brow in soft, natural waves. His skin, kissed with the hue of honeyed porcelain, glowed in the light of the setting sun. His presence was a quiet storm, still yet brimming with energy beneath the surface. Their eyes met, and the world held its breath.]

    So well written...I love the description ❤️

     

    [Chan watched the space where he’d been. The world felt a little quieter now. The stars were brighter. And his heart… his heart was no longer his. He sat back down on the stone ledge of the cliff, arms resting on his knees, eyes fixed skyward. He was going to marry that man.

    He didn’t know his name, didn’t know where he came from. But none of it mattered. Not to his heart. The moment he’d seen him, something ancient had shifted. A quiet vow had already formed in his soul.

    I’m going to spend the rest of my life loving you.

    He wanted to kneel in a field of stars, pull out a ring made of something eternal, and ask him to stay forever]

    This is so poetic I'm crying 😭

     

    Well, they're going to be shocked when they find out their real identity hehehe

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    1. chanlixlau on Chapter 2 Sun 24 Aug 2025 04:15AM UTC

      People who read the first 6 chapters from my instagram told me the I write a lot of descriptions and I should focus more on the dialogues… I don’t know 🤷🏻‍♀️

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      1. Account Deleted on Chapter 2 Tue 26 Aug 2025 06:00PM UTC

        I think having a bit of balance between the two would be nice

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        1. chanlixlau on Chapter 2 Tue 26 Aug 2025 07:49PM UTC

          Thanks for your opinion ♥️

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