Comment on you never threaten my life (like you did so long ago)

  1. swagche on Chapter 1 Tue 20 May 2025 09:06PM UTC

    man waits for a subway train to fully arrive. the station is in space with earth seen in the background.

    Like she’s heaving deep breaths for some kind of unseen audience.

    nice detail

    “You said we were going to be forever,” Agatha spits, ignoring Rio completely. “You gave me a ring and told me you only loved me and then you flirted with that blonde skank at my funeral!”

    Rio can’t decide which part of that sentence is more confusing, blonde skank or funeral. She’s never liked blondes. She’s never liked anyone but Agatha. “At your- Agatha, what the fuck are you talking about?”

    “Is that her name?!” Agatha shrieks, and reels back with one open palm. When it comes down on the side of Rio’s cheek, stinging the skin, she shrinks back. She used to like when Agatha slapped her. Look what centuries of separation can do to a desperate sub, Rio thinks ruefully, then finally processes Agatha’s words.

    lol

    “It’s Agnes, I’m Agnes, I’m your girlfriend and I love you and I’ve loved you forever and I’d kill for you, I’ve killed for you, Riley!”

    riley, nice

    “Now, why does that sound familiar,” Rio grumbles, ducking a strike from the blunt end of Agatha’s knife, aimed at her temple. Louder, she protests, “if you love me, why are you trying to kill me?”

    “It’s how I show affection!” Agatha shrieks. Rio pauses for a second, crouched in the dirt; she’s got a point. They do tend to get a lot of their mushy feelings out by throwing each other into trees and making each other bleed.

    love them

    “We’re in high school?” This is more horrifying to Rio than anything else that’s been revealed so far. “Oh, you’ve gotta be kidding me.”

    real

    Reality-twisting hexes, meant to alter the mindscape – and in some cases, limited physical space; Rio thinks of her own transformation – can’t create story from scratch. Everything within the bounds of the hex is informed by something else, including history, including time, so… whatever Agnes the knife wielding debate team captain is angry at Riley about, Agatha’s angry at Rio for the exact same thing.

    the worldbuilding details are fun

    Betrayal. Like a shield of cracked ice around Rio’s lumpy black heart. A promise broken. A love lost.

    not so fun :(

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